Thursday, February 9, 2012

Floating Lady

So our assignment for Visual Storytelling was to make 4 panels after this image:
After a bunch of doodling, I came up with this sequence (read left to right):
8.5x11 folded twice, done with pencil hence smudgapalooza.
 The critiques I mostly got with this sequence was:
-Panel 2 had 2 things happening- the primary point I wanted was someone getting out as the second dude was making a call. The solution was to push back the secondary one and try to show the first more clearly.
-Panel 3 and 4 were redundant, in that both were showing the man about to take his glove off. Every panel should be bringing in new information and insight. So panel 3 ought to be indicating his approach to the body, and panel 4 reveals what's underneath the glove he's taking off. Also the depiction of taking the glove off was not clear and the focus (oooh shiny hand) in panel 4 was too low and ought to be in the center of the frame.

Storyboards Mark also critiqued on, my stuff are in the lower right. 


Digital do over, applying the critiques. 


No comments:

Post a Comment